Three days before my sixteenth birthday, I discovered a lump on my right breast. Only a week later, I found myself in the operating room and realized that something as commonplace as an IV tube was uncomfortable. There were other painful surprises as well. The anesthesia suddenly ran through the veins of my left arm, bringing a burning sensation with it, and I drifted away under the bright lights of the operating room. It felt like only moments later that I was drifting in and out of consciousness in the recovery room. Nauseous from the medication, I vomited. Then, a nurse came by, only to cringe and shun my helplessness.
Although that nurse eventually returned to care for me, her initial reaction remains ingrained in my memory. Consequently, since choosing the profession of medicine, I vowed to treat patients differently -- with the respect and sympathy they deserve. Today, I have confirmed this decision with several years of training and experience that have refined my goals for my medical career. I plan to work as an advocate for the sick, offering a bridge of communication between administrators, physicians, and patients, in hopes of more effectively managing healthcare institutions. To ready myself for this career, I seek systematic training in medical school as the next step.
Still sixteen, only two months after my eye-opening experience as a cancer patient, I found myself in the operating again -- this time as a volunteer, observing a similar surgery. But unlike mine, the tumor of this 47-year-old woman was unfortunately malignant. As I followed her through the recovery room, I stayed by her side, offering her whatever comfort I could. A week later, her husband visited the Ambulatory Surgery Unit to thank us for the care we provided his wife, who was still too weak for visitors. Today, I make certain to consider and anticipate patients’ unavoidable fears and concerns as I approach them.
Then, recently at NYU Tisch Hospital, I began to learn about another type of communication that is falling short in hospitals today: the link between doctors and administrators. Such a link plays a crucial role in the efficient allocation of healthcare --, a job in which physicians play a critical role, for only they fully understand patients’ needs. To obtain a greater understanding of these issues, I chose to pursue my Master of Public Administration in health policy and management at the NYU Wagner School of Public Service. By doing so, I have become more closely acquainted with the ways in which physicians can improve clinical outcomes while continuing to treat patients and communicate with administration effectively.
Desiring to apply my studies to a practical understanding of healthcare administration, I am currently conducting health services research for the Vice President of Woodson Hospital, Patricia Burke. I am responsible for the statistical analysis of her research, which analyzes which factors in hospital reengineering have affected hospital cost position and market share. At the same time, under the supervision of Dr. Andrew Newman, I am developing an interdisciplinary curriculum on global health at the NYU Center for Global Health, which provides clinicians the opportunity to work in international settings and respond to humanitarian disasters.
In all, the training and experience I have gained to date provide me with the necessary tools for my service as a liaison between physicians and administrators. After I supplement those tools with an education at medical school, I will have the capability to further the mission to improve patient outcomes. Today, as I value patient experience, I plan for the future; I am prepared to integrate my skills as an observer, an effective communicator, and a diligent researcher to act as an advocate for the sick. I hope to be among the future physician leaders who will build the bridges among physicians, patients, and administrators. I look forward to the challenge.
点评:
这是一篇申请公共事务中医学方向的一篇很成功的PS。
首先,我们看一下这篇文章的总体结构。
第一部分,开头。通过自己在16岁时候的经历成功的引入,这部分非常的成功,是比较吸引人的,作为一篇文章来说,在这里很成功的CATCH了读者的目光。
第二部分,过度。结合了自己之前作为病人的经历,结合了自己的认识,非常合理,非常合乎逻辑的过渡到了下一个部分。
第三部分,主体。这个部分主要是在讲述一些自己在专业方面的经历,以及通过事件的叙述和自己想法的讲述很明确的将出申请这个专业的必要性,以及他为什么要什么。当然在此同时也表现出他在专业方面的理解和认识。
第四部分,升华和结尾。在前文的基础上做了适当的升华和总结,并对自己未来的目标做了综述。
这篇文章的结构非常清晰,并且非常的合理。合理的结构是建立在严谨的逻辑思维上的。整篇文章的字里行间都透漏着严密的逻辑性。一篇文章是最可以考察一个人的逻辑思维能力的,该作者通过该文章几近完美的秀了一把自己的逻辑思维能力。作为这样一个交叉学科,对于招生准则来说,逻辑思维能力是相当重要的。
在文章当中,作者选择了很多贴近生活的经历,是实实在在自己的经历。这样让整篇文章看起来非常的亲切,而亲切的根源来自于自己真实的情感,虽然没有很多华丽的词藻,没有磅礴的气势,但是很有说服力。因为作者把自己写了进去。把自己优秀的一面完全的展示给了去阅读的人。
这篇文章的劣势也是非常的明显的。虽然作者列举了很多的事例,也讲述了很多的事情。但是作为他这样一个人,有很多的相关经验的人,并没有很清晰的展示自己的真实要点。比如说自己在专业方面的想法,自己在做项目时候的原创想法。这些东西都是非常必要的,并不用那么多的言语来讲自己的经历,而是通过对一两个经历的描述来展现自己的专业深度和能力。很遗憾的,作者并没有注意到这点。而是把PS做成了一个大号的简历。
译文:
医生与管理的联系
在我16岁的生日前三天,我在我右边的胸部上发现了肿块。 只有一星期之后,我发现我自己在手术室中而且意识到像IV管一样平凡是不舒服的。 在那里也有让人吃惊的疼痛。 麻醉剂很快的通过手臂上的缝隙经过血管进入我的身体,一种滚烫的感觉,并且我再手术室里的明亮的灯光下昏睡过去。 就好像是很小的一会一样,我就回复了意识。 令人作呕的药物治疗,令我呕吐。 然后,一位护士经过了,可是她却仅仅事经过,没有发现我的无助。
尽管那位护士最后一直在照顾我, 但是,她的表现在我的记忆保持根深蒂固。 因此我选择医学作为我的职业, 我发誓我要不同于这个护士一样的对待病人 – 融入尊敬和同情,我想他们该得到这样的对待。 今天,我不但为我的这个目标准备了很多年,并且也更坚定了我在我职业目标上的信念。 我计划为病人担任一个提倡者,提供在管理人、医师和病人之间的一座沟通的桥,希望更有效管理医疗机构。 为了这一事业而提升我自己,所以我要进行我下一个步骤,我要进入医学院继续深造。
还是16岁那年,在我知道我患有癌症之后的2个月,我又一次在手术室的经历 -- 这次是一个志愿者, 观察一个相似的手术。 但是不像我的, 这个 47 岁的女人的肿瘤是恶性的。 当我经过恢复房,我站在她旁边, 我尽我最大的可能安慰她。 一星期之后,她的丈夫来感谢我们,感谢我们对太太的照顾,尽管她还是那么的虚弱。 今天,当我接近他们的時我很确定的发现他们心中无法掩饰的恐惧。
的确,自从我那次的志愿者工作之后,我又在其他的很多医院里取得了很多工作经验, 我一直在继续我和病人间有效的互动。我的角色在雅典的医神医院和 Bellevue 医院外伤中心里,我已经锻炼出我在提供给病人私人帮助方面的才能。 利用我可以熟练地运用多种语言,我利用我在本科阶段学到的技能----罗曼斯语建立起在医生和病人之间的一座沟通的桥梁。
然后,最近在 NYU Tisch 医院,我开始学习正在今天在医院中明显不足的沟通类型: 医生和管理人之间的连线。这样的一种连线在提高医疗资源分配方面起到了非常重要的作用 ----, 内科医生扮演重要角色,如果他们完全知道病人的需求。 为了要获得这些议题的较棒的理解,我选择在 NYU 继续学习Master of Public Administration in health policy and management在NYU Wagner School of Public Service。藉由这么做,当继续有效地治疗病人而且与之沟通的时候,我已经越来越接近那种可以让医师更行之有效的解决医疗问题。
需要应用我的研究到医疗管理的实际理解,我现在正在进行 Woodson 医院的副总裁的公共医疗研究,Patricia Burke。 我负责她的研究的统计分析, 分析哪些医院的业务流程在设计已经影响医院费用和市场占有率。 同时,在安德鲁纽曼博士的领导之下,我们正在发展一个个学科之间的交叉课程,这个课程可以为全球的健康事业提供很多临床医生教师为国际设置工作并对人道主义灾难负责。
我已经得到的训练和经验到此为已经可以为我提供成功的钥匙就像一个联络线一样在医生和管理者之间。 在我用医学院的教育补充我的钥匙之后,我将会有能力改善现在病人的待遇。 今天, 就像我分析评估病人的经历一样,我为我今后做了规划; 我准备整合我学到的知识来作为一个观察员,一个有效的通訊器和一个用功的研究员和一个病人的保护者。 我希望在将会在医师、病人和管理人之间建立有效的沟通之桥。 我盼望挑战。
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