劳资关系（Industrial Relations）专业申请文书

Statement of purpose which includes applicants reasons for undertaking graduate work, explanation of study interests, and their relation to the applicant's undergraduate study and professional goals.

点评：第一段是一个单独的部分，是全文内容的总结，介绍了文章中自己所介绍的内容，使阅读者可以不看文章，先了解到里面的大致内容。开篇方法比较新颖。

The decision for me to become an industrial relations major was not really my own, I have to admit. My uncle, a human resource manager with Welch-Ally, spent the majority of every holiday gathering throughout my senior year of high school trying to dissuade me from becoming a business major. He would tell me, "This is a rare undergraduate degree and a growing field." Then he would frighten me by saying, "We have very similar personalities, so you would be a fantastic H.R. manager." Eventually he convinced me that it was my best option. And I haven't regretted it.

点评：第二段介绍他选择这个专业时，家里的反对，选材比较也特点。主要是为下文做铺垫。

Although I credit my uncle with inspiring my initial decision, my constantly growing interest in this field and desire to continue my education has grown from two sources: the Industrial Relations faculty at Lemoyne and my vocation as a martial arts instructor for almost five years. From my professors, I have learned the practical side of my intended profession: the multitude of laws protecting worker's rights in the workplace, procedures for collective bargaining and arbitration, and how compensation systems function. My job, on the other hand, has helped me acquire the "people" skills that are crucial to being an effective H.R. manager. In the course of a normal workday, I must communicate with a diverse group of people ranging in age from three to seventy-two years old. Each student has unique needs and goals that I must identify and pay attention to. I must constantly evaluate students and give them constructive feedback, walking that fine line between support and criticism. At the same time, I delegate tasks to the less senior instructors and class helpers, while helping them improve their teaching skills. It is challenging and constantly educational. These two sources, my professors and my job, have succeeded in transforming a disinterested college freshman into a senior who has a focused career path.

点评：这段是全文中比较关键的一个点，是一个转折点。作者通过自己自身的体验和理解，在实践中真正认识到了这个专业的作用和重要性，从不理解演变成喜爱上这个专业。写出了作者对专业的认识和作用，乃至决定申请更高的学位，进行深入的学习。

My ultimate career goal is to be a general human resource manager or recruiter for a high-tech or pharmaceutical company. These are industries in which I foresee great potential for growth in the future. I enjoy every aspect of my major, and I look forward to the variety of tasks and obstacles I will face as an H.R. manager. The prospect of interacting with people on a daily basis appeals to me immensely in a job. Working as a recruiter likewise interests me because it would involve convincing potential employees to work for my company. This is precisely what I do at my current job. It is my responsibility to make new students feel at ease, develop rapport with them quickly, and then sell our program's values and benefits. All of my experience would be relevant and useful to a career as an H.R. manager.

点评：这段作者描写了一下自己通过学习后，对职业的展望和目标。同时体现出了毕业后，自己在专业上的提高和对职业的帮助，自己利用所学知识快乐工作，享受工作的愉悦。是作者对今后就业和职业目标的认识体现。

Cornell University represents an attractive program for me because the curriculum is practical and many of the classes utilize computers and software specifically designed for human resources. Also, a Master's degree from a well-respected program like Cornell would be essential in helping me achieve my goal of working for a large, possibly Fortune 500 company. I ask that you examine my grades to see the discrepancy between my Freshman/Sophomore and Junior/Senior years. The change reflects my growing interest in industrial relations and my ability to balance working almost full-time with being a full-time commuting student. If accepted, I will bring to Cornell a strong academic background in human resources and hands-on management experience. I am extremely committed to my career goals, and I believe that attending Cornell will help me fulfill them.

点评：最后一段没有什么特别的，是传统的结尾方式。主要就是说一下说一些学校好，和自己毕业后的目标及改变。

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文章大纲：

本文从结构上来看，主要分为四大部分，第一部分是第一段和第二段，主要是为下文作铺垫，从侧面反映出选择此专业的决心；第二部分是第二段，是文章的核心，通过写自己的实际经历，展现了自己喜爱上这个专业的过程和对专业的认识。体现了相关的专业背景和优势，不仅层次感很强，而且描写得很细致。第三部分是第四段，激情澎湃的展现了自己运用所学知识在工作中的表现，使文章升华到达高潮。第四部分是结尾，作者结合自己的职业理想直接点明康乃尔大学此项目的优势以及我的加入能带来的价值，同时大胆的给自己的职业目标进行了规划。

中心思想

文章以作者不顾家里反对，选择专业，认识专业和喜爱专业为主线，展开一系列的描写。很好的体现出了自己喜爱上这个专业的原因和决定把它定位自己职业目标的过程。

素材取材

取材全部是自己的亲身经历，选材合理，真实生动。全文主要围绕自己的兴趣展开，这是贯穿全文的一条主线。

本文立意

本文开篇就先点明了全篇的内容，整篇文章是以作者追求和奋斗的过程立意的。

可以借鉴的地方

本文逻辑合理，语言简练，思路清晰，虽然跨专业申请，但很好的体现了自己的兴趣，学习经历，同时很自然的把自己的经历跟申请专业结合。选材方式很合理，体现了自己的相关优势。值得借鉴。

译文：

这篇个人陈述中包括了我申请研究生项目的动机，兴趣的介绍，本科阶段专业学习背景与申请项目之间的关系，和我的职业的目标。

选择劳资关系专业起初并不是我自己的想法，我必须承认。我的叔叔是一位资源管理经理，他用大部分节假日时间，来试图劝，让我主修商科。他告诉我，“这是一个非常杰出的学位、一个正在成长的领域”。当时他还用谚语吓唬我“我们有非常相同的性格，因此你将成为一个很好的人力资源经理。”最后他确信那将是我最好的选择。那样我将没有任何遗憾。

虽然我相信叔叔最初给我灌输思想，但后来，我在这个领域逐渐增强了兴趣，继续学习愿望也增强了。主要来自两个方面：劳资关系的才能和我将近5年的武术教师的职业。从我的教授那里，我学到了这个职业比较实用的一面：在车间，劳资双方针对工资等问题进行谈判、仲裁，赔偿制度的职责，所有这些方面多数法律是保护工人的权利的。我的工作，在另一方面，已经帮助我学到了人力资源管理这方面的技巧，这对于我成为一个出色的人力资源经理是至关重要的。在正常的工作期间，我必须和不同的人群交流包括3岁到72岁的人们。每个学生都有不同的需求和目标我必须识别和注意。我必须经常的评价学生并且给他们建设性的反馈，在支持和批评之间要有奖罚分明的线路。同时，我给少数的高级教师和班级助手委派任务以便帮助他们提高教学技能。它是负有挑战性的和教育性的。这两个来源，我的教授和我的工作，已经成功的转化成了一个无私的学院，即新生进入更高一级的职业通道。

我最终的职业目标是成为一个人力资源经理或者招聘人员，针对那些高科技或者药物公司。这些行业是我预知的将来最有增长潜力的行业。我喜欢我专业的每一个方面，我期盼任务的变化，及作为一个人力资源经理我将面对的障碍。工作中与人相互影响的前景无限，吸引着我。作为招聘人员同样的使我产生兴趣，因为令人信服的，有潜力的职工即将为我的公司工作。这正是我目前所做的工作。使新的学生感到自由自在、迅速的与他们发展和谐的关系，然后出售我们的项目价值和利益，这是我的责任。所有我的这些经验对于一个人力资源经理的职业生涯都是相关的和有用的。

对于我来说康乃尔大学的项目对我表现出了很大吸引力，因为它的课程是实用的，并且多数上层社会，利用计算机软件特定的设计来做人力资源。而且，来自康乃尔大学这个非常受尊敬的学位项目，将从本质上帮助我达到我要进入世界500强公司的目标。我要求你们检查我的等级以便了解我的大学三年之间的差异。这个差异反映了我在劳资关系方面正在增长的兴趣和平衡全部工作时间的能力。如果我被你们接受，我将带给康乃尔大学坚固的人力资源理论背景和我的管理经验。我非常的终于我的职业目标，我相信参加康乃尔大学将帮助我实现我的职业理想。