文书点评：兽医背景（Veterinary Background）

Veterinary Background

Changing the bandage on an angry bulldog’s paw or trimming the hooves of a 2000-pound draft horse can be an intimidating venture. Curing animals requires compassion, precision, and confidence; it is also an excellent way to learn about practicing medicine and to feel the satisfaction of helping someone in need. Due to my rural background, knowledge of animals, and love of science, I began working for a local veterinarian at a young age. Later in life, when I decided to become a physician, I saw that my veterinary experiences had prepared me well for a career in health care.

When I started volunteering in an emergency room, I learned that humans really aren't so different from other animals -- I needed to show my compassion in order to earn their trust before I could heal or comfort them. When a child or widow brought me their dying pet and pleaded for me to cure it, I had to soothe the person as well as the animal. I used this calm compassion in the emergency room when comforting the family of a father who had just suffered a heart attack, or when talking with a husband frantic about his wife’s car accident. I saw further similarities between human and animal medicine when I shadowed Dr. Harry Williams in his family practice. I saw that his close relationship with his patients led him to keep thinking of them long after his office closed for the day. Likewise, as a veterinary technician, I had often carefully considered how to help each animal. Compassion is truly a prerequisite for any career in health care.

In my work with animals, I learned that perseverance is key to successful treatment. Interruption of that treatment can lead to disastrous results. In many rural communities near my home, I witnessed the consequences of the absence of consistent medical care. As a farrier, I have worked in many old-order Mennonite communities whose needs aren’t being met: when one client's daughter injured her hand in a corn sheller, she was unable to get medical care because facilities were far away and no doctors could come to their farm. The girl’s hand was infected and not healing well. I did what I could, but I was troubled that I didn’t have the expertise to treat the injury. On my next visit, I saw that her hand had grown deformed. Had she been able to see a physician more frequently, her hand might have healed correctly. Encounters of this kind have revealed to me the consequences of medically underserved communities. I look forward to working toward a solution to this problem when I am a physician.

A good veterinarian operates with precision. I have applied the careful, exacting skills I learned with animals to my lab work. I am currently involved in research on corneal endothelium with Dr. Carson Kennedy. In the lab, we study mammalian corneal cells; eventually, we would like to describe and prevent ophthalmic diseases such as glaucoma. Through this work, I have honed my scientific skills and sharpened my analytical mind. It is exhilarating to catch a glimpse of valuable knowledge, not yet known by anyone, which has the potential to help many people. It is also very rewarding to know that I have contributed to the advancement of medicine by providing research results that will improve people’s health.

Perhaps the most important quality required to practice human or animal medicine is confidence. In the lab, in the emergency room, and in the field, I have had many opportunities to observe the importance of confident leadership to a medical practice. Over the years, I have observed that the best veterinarians and physicians handle each issue swiftly and appropriately, delegating tasks to others with self-assurance. In every medical situation, someone must take the lead role while working to manage the team. Leadership roles have always come naturally to me -- I spent twelve years working toward becoming an Eagle Scout and helping my younger brother to do the same. The composure I gained as a troop leader helped me to excel in my role as supervisor at a large walking horse farm. Since then, I have grown into leadership roles that required more significant responsibilities. I am comfortable as a leader because I am confident in my ability to ensure the health and safety of others. The leadership skills I have developed will be a vital part of my work as a physician.

When I began working as a veterinary technician, I did not fully realize that the skills I gained would be so applicable to my eventual career as a physician. Yet my experiences with animals have provided me with an excellent foundation to continue my studies of human health and well-being. I am eager to develop the medical knowledge I have gained thus far in order to become the kind of physician my community will be able to rely on.

点评：

这是一篇申请医学的文章是很成功的。说实话我是很喜欢的。

我们看一下这篇文章的结构：

第一部分，开头。在这部分开门见山的点中了题目，兽医的经历。

第二部分，延伸引入。光看了开头让人很迷惑，怎么兽医的来申请医学了呢。所以这里解释引入一下，高速别人，我之前的经历和和现在的申请有关系的。

第三部分，主体。这里主要是在讲自己的医学上的经历，跟老师做实验也好，还是之前的社会活动，结合这些事情来说自己在医学上的认识，非常的真实也令人信服。而且作者的逻辑性很强，由潜到深的叙述，一切都显得那么自然。虽然很多东西都是专业的东西，但是结合他所说的东西并不显得枯燥。

第四部分，升华。通过对主体部分的总结，写出了自己对专业的一些看法，领导能力对于外科医生非常重要。并且详细的写出了自己的观点。

第五部分，结尾。在升华的基础上，点名了自己的目的，说出了自己的目标。

可以说这篇文章的格式是相当的标准的，一共是6段，分为很标准的5个部分。结构清晰，让人可以很清晰的知道作者要表达的思想和内容。不像很多作者在做文章的时候太散太乱。这篇文章中我最喜欢的就是这点。而且这篇文章的中心很明确，并且用兽医的经历把整个文章串了起来。可以说兽医的经历就好像是一根绳子，牢牢的把各个部分有机的连接起来，让人看到文章的时候第一个感觉就是整体感好。

文字方面我也是比较喜欢的，那就是作者驾驭文字的能力，他并没有选择卖弄他的文字工地，而是很准确的使用了文字。很多词都用的恰到好处，这是值得我们学习的。因为有很多申请者一味的注意文字的绚丽，并且在这方面追求的有点走火入魔，最终捡了芝麻丢了西瓜。再有，这篇文章的另外一个优点就是逻辑思维好。

我认为这篇文章最大的劣势是，在这里过多的描述了专业方面的兴趣。作者通过很多的事例，由浅入深的来描述他对于专业的兴趣。为什么他要选择这个专业，这个专业有什么意义。他对于这个专业的看法，他的一些真实的想法。但是这些东西毕竟有些空。在这里我相信更重要一些的是他的专业能力，也就是说他作为一个医生来讲的能力。必须要展示一下。我相信有很多人都能在认识上达到作者的这个高度，但是专业上呢？这里应该有专业的展示。但是很可惜我在文章里没有找到。

译文：

兽医背景

给一个愤怒的牛头犬的爪子或者是一个2000磅重的大马的蹄子换绷带是一件冒险的事情。 给动物做治疗是需要爱心，细心和自信的。这也同样是一种出众的方式来学习医学的实践和会让人在帮助你需要帮助的人或动物的时候感觉到满足。 由于我乡下背景，对动物的爱，以及对科学的热情，当我还很小的时候我就为一个当地的兽医工作了。 稍后，当我决定成为一个医师的时候，我发现我的兽医经历已经很好的在医疗方面为我提供了宝贵的经历。

当我开始在一个急诊室中当志愿者的时候，我发现人类和其他的动物真是石油很大的不同 -- 在我治疗和安慰他们之前，我必须要以我的热情让他们信任我。 当一个孩子或寡妇带给我他们的垂死的宠物而且希望我救治他们, 我必须让人和动物同时平静下来。

当安慰一个心脏病发作父亲的家庭的时候，我在急诊室中用了这一招, 或当一个出车祸的女人的丈夫说话的时候。 当我跟着Dr. Harry Williams做家庭练习的时候，我发现人类和动物更为相似的一面。 正工作了一天之后，他还很关心他的病人，一直在想并考虑病人的相关问题。 同样地，当做一个兽医的技术人员时，我时常小心地考虑该如何帮助每只动物。 医德对于作为医生来说最重要的。

在我和动物的工作中，我了解了毅力是成功的治疗关键。治疗的中断能导致损失惨重的结果。 在我的家附近的许多的社区，我目击了缺少一致医疗的结果。 身为一个兽医，我已经为old-order Mennonite communities里的一些有一些需要但是没有被实现的人工作了很多： 因为没有设备，而且没有医生可以到达他们的农场，所以当一个客户的女儿在一个玉米剥壳器中伤了她手的时候，她不能够得到应有的医疗照护。 女孩的手被感染而且痊愈得不好。 我做了所有我能做的，但是我没有任何处理这样事情的经验。 当我第二次取看她的时候，我看见有的那只手长成了畸形。如果她能及时的找到一个医生，她的手会恢复像她没受伤前一样。 像这类遭遇显示了社区医学服务不周到的结果。如果我能成为一个医生，我想我会解决这样的问题了。

一个好兽医在做手术的时候一定要下手准确。 我已经在现在的实验室里的试验中用到了我在做兽医的时候学习到的小心又精确的技术。 我现在正在和Dr. Carson Kennedy一起做角膜移植方面的研究。 在实验室中，我们研究哺乳动物的角膜细胞; 最后，我们可以理解和预防一些眼科疾病比如说白内障。 通过这样的工作，我已经磨练了我的专业技能和分析能力。 发现有价值的知识是令人欣喜的, 尤其是那些还没有被很多人知道, 并且有可能帮助到很多人。我已经知道可能会改善人的健康的研究结果成为医学的进步。

也许最重要的一点是必需的提升人类或者动物对医疗的信心。 在实验室中，在急诊室中, 和在这个领域中，我已经有许多机会观察一个自信领导对于医学联系的影响。 数年以来，我观察过很多优秀的兽医和外科医生很快速很恰当的处理了很多病人, 对病人充分的展示了自己的信心在各种医疗情况下，有个人比如要但当起领导的角色必须有人要有效的管理和领导这个团队。 领导角色对我来说是很自然地—我为了成为Eagle Scout用了我12年的时间并且我也在帮助我弟弟做同样的事情。 在我通过在一群人中的领导地位得倒了冷静，帮助了我在养马的农场里像一个导师。之后，我已经发展成了更多的重要工作的领导。 因为我确信我有能力可以保障其他人的安全和健康，所以我当我是领袖的时候很满足。 我的领导才能是我作为一个医师的重要部份。

当我开始担任一个兽医的技术人员的时候，我不完全了解我得到的技术会对我作为一个医师有很大的帮助。我和动物的经验为我提供一个优良的基础让我继续我的人类健康的研究。 我热切于研究医学知识，这是建立在我能够被信任的基础上的。