文书点评：教育学（Education）申请文书

As a single mother who has confronted homelessness and poverty, I am committed to reforming public education. I have a particular interest in improving the accessibility of schooling to homeless individuals, single mothers, and disadvantaged women of color. As a result of my own experiences, I am familiar with the despair and frustration endemic to individuals struggling to survive. I am convinced that increasing individuals' access to education can make the difference between despondency and hope. I am applying for my doctorate in educational leadership so that I can pursue my life-mission: to make education accessible to all.

I began preparing for this mission by volunteering as an intake coordinator at the Christian Assistance Ministry (CAM). Although I had many responsibilities, the role that consumed most of my time and energy was interviewing clients and assessing their physical and emotional needs. One of my greatest contributions was streamlining and updating the paperwork associated with CAM's intake process. I also generated an updated resource list that included many service agencies in the Houston area. By personally contacting each agency to acquire contact information and to learn about its services, I facilitated greater communication between service organizations and ensured that my clients had access to necessary aid.

In my present position as Research Analyst at SeaNet, my primary role is ascertaining the needs of client networks. As an umbrella group, SeaNet has only limited contact with small business development centers, and my job is to ensure that our organization meets these centers' needs. When I took the initiative to send out surveys asking agencies to rate our group's effectiveness, I received an overwhelming response. The information I compiled was so revealing that it was published in the quarterly report that is sent to our funding agency in Washington, D.C. In addition, I have been involved in a number of special, innovative projects. Recently, I analyzed the availability of renewable energy resources in Southern Texas in tandem with The Economic Development Center, Solar Energy, Brooks Air Force Base, and research universities in Texas.

As part of my master's thesis, I collaborated with Upward Bound, Peace Center, and the Davis Education Foundation to underline the importance of community cooperation in public schools. I also provided informational brochures and handouts detailing other such organizations that could assist with the individualized needs of schools. I was gratified when my efforts resulted in teachers and administrators contacting several of the organizations I had mentioned so that the organizations could start outreach in their educational districts.

Although I have not yet been employed in the educational sector, my master's work, as well as my life experiences, has given me a nuanced and sophisticated knowledge of the educational field. I have acted as a mentor at Davis Middle School for many years and have tutored a number of home-schooled children. When my own children attended school, I was involved in their schools' organizations and often took on a leadership role on educational committees. I served on many boards and was active in assisting both instructors and administrators. Fifteen years of experience has familiarized me with the diverse needs of Houston's students, and it has prepared me to act on their behalf.

My short-term goals include advancing my knowledge of quantitative research using programs such as SPSS and Microcas, and acquiring a sophisticated understanding of how to become a leader in the educational field. I wish to use these skills to promote empirical studies in education that can help direct educational reform.

I am attracted to the doctoral program at Texas A&M for precisely this reason. Only Texas A&M offers the kind of collaborative experience that suits my personal needs and professional goals. Over the past four years, I have seen the department blossom into a challenging and innovative program. I am excited about the program's direction and its emphasis on practical application. I appreciate that every course offers the opportunity for independent research, and that the faculty is open to student suggestions for improvement. The flexibility and patience of the faculty and the talent of the students makes Texas A&M a singular choice for my doctoral degree.

My long-term goal is to use my past experience and Texas A&M training to help make education accessible to all, particularly the underprivileged. Whether I am working in the public or private sector, I look forward to addressing the nation's urgent need to educate its citizens efficiently and comprehensively.

评语：

这篇文章主要是想表达出申请者致力于普及教育，对教育改革能有所作为，在最后两段写出选择学校的原因和未来发展目标。作者提供了很多有关个人经历的素材，如：基督徒援助会咨询、网络公司客户意向分析研究、研究社会组织和学校合作的毕业论文、给学生作辅导、参与教委会议等等工作。可以看出，申请者确实有过很丰富的经历，对教育行业有过自己的探讨，但是给读者的感觉可能是：这些素材放在一起可能会有一点杂乱而找不到方向的感觉。但实际上，作者是想让读者感受到体会一种需求并想办法满足这种需求的过程。所以，较好的办法是把这条特征放在文中总结起来，使读者能够更快地发现作者想要表现的观点。

译文：

作为一个单身母亲，我曾经经历过贫穷与无家可归的境地，并决心要为学校教育的改革做点贡献。对于提高孤儿、单身母亲以及处于弱势群体的黑人们的入学机会，我一直特别感兴趣。由于我自己也有过和他们相近的经历，我很清楚这些人一直在各种绝望与挫败感中挣扎着。我坚信，提高他们的受教育程度能够使他们走出绝望，看到希望。所以我申请教育管理学的博士学位课程，希望将来能够实现我一生的愿望：让所有人都能接受教育。

为了这个理想，我曾自愿在基督徒互援会的接待员。我做过各种工作，但是占据大部分时间和精力的是和客户面谈，了解他们的物质和精神的需求。我觉得自己比较突出的一项贡献就是很好地组织并改善了基督徒互援会接待工作中的文书工作流程。我还整理出了一份包括休斯敦地区所有服务类资源的最新的列表。通过亲自和这些服务机构的沟通，获得他们的联系信息与服务内容，我建立了一个更强大的通讯网络，使我们的客户能更方便、快捷地获得各类援助。

我现在是Seanet网络公司的研究分析师，主要工作是了解客户对网络的需求。由于Seanet网络服务组对外比较封闭，他只与少数的几个商业发展中心有联系。而我的工作就是要确认我们的服务能够使这些商业中心满意。我主动给商户们发调查问卷，希望他们评价一下我们网络的效率，他们很积极地回复了我。我收集到的这些信息对公司的发展很有启发性，这些内容被登在了公司的季刊上并邮寄到了我们在华盛顿的基金机构。除此以外，我还参与了许多特殊项目的开发。最近，在德州经济发展中心研究太阳能分部、布鲁克斯空军基地和一些大学研究中心的共同努力下，我对南德州可重复利用的能源资源的可行性作了分析。

我的硕士论文是与教育部“攀登”基金项目、和平中心、戴维斯教育基金会合作完成的，论文主要是想强调社会团体与公立学校合作的重要性。我还提供了一些这类帮助人们接受教育的社会组织的宣传册和新闻报导。有些学校的老师们和管理者们联系了一些我提到过的社会组织，这些社会组织因此在教育领域有了更多的发展，这也令我很有成就感。

虽然我没有在教育行业工作过，但是我的硕士论文以及我的这些经历使我对教育领域有了很深入的了解。我在戴维斯中学当过好几年指导老师，还给一些学生做过家庭辅导。当我的孩子开始上学时，我在他的学校教导处担任职位，并经常在教委担任领导职务。我参与了许多会议并积极地协助教学和管理。在这一行15年的阅历使我对休斯敦学生各种各样的需求都十分了解，这也帮助我去更好地为他们服务。

我的短期目标是增强我使用SPSS和Microcas软件进行数量分析的水平，以便于更了解如何在教育领域成为一个好的领导者。我希望能够利用这些技术改善一些尚处于试验阶段的教学方式并对整个教育改革有一定的帮助。

我对Texas A&M大学的博士课程比较感兴趣的原因就在于，只有这所大学提供了许多合作项目的机会，非常符合我个人的偏好和专业目标。在过去的4年中，我看到这个系别发展了很多很有挑战型和创新的项目。我对这些研究项目和它们的应用非常感兴趣，我特别喜欢它为每一个课程设置独立的研究项目，而且学生可以经常接受教授的亲自辅导。正是因为学生能够很方便地得到教授的耐心辅导，而且在这里学习能接触到许多非常有天赋的学生，所以我选择到Texas A&M大学继续我的博士课程。

我的长期目标是根据我过去的经验以及在Texas A&M大学接受的教育，能够帮助更多人获得受教育的机会，尤其是那些生活水平处于社会下层的人们。无论是公立的还是私立的机构，我都希望能够帮助我的祖国解决这些问题，提高教学的效率，扩大受教育人群的队伍。