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I held up my little plastic wand and blew breath through its hoop-end, and bubbles appeared. Esperanza, a little Guatemalan girl, stopped whimpering and stared with fascination. After I spoke words of comfort to her in Spanish, she grew even more intrigued. A day later she had her appointment for surgery at the hospital there in Guatemala. I scrubbed in for Esperanza’s surgery and sat beside her in the recovery area. When her eyes fluttered open and she began to cry, I again opened my bottle of bubbles. At the moment when she reached her hands up at my bubbles, I knew more assuredly than ever that I would reach for a career in medicine. Although I had been fascinated by physicians since my own childhood, it was Esperanza who showed me the specific rewards the medical profession could offer me. Today, I view medicine as the only way for me to couple science with my intense compassion for humanity -- to improve the lives of others like her.

Although I was in Guatemala when I met Esperanza, an equally powerful series of events occurred much closer to home. One of my best friends was diagnosed with metastatic ovarian cancer, one month before her senior prom and one year before she would die. I attended classes on the same campus where she underwent treatment, where she fought in vain for her life. Although plagued by the intangible emotional anguish of watching a close friend endure what I had only seen during rounds with oncologists, I also immediately became insatiably curious about the clinical aspects of the cancer. Part of me felt that I should avoid asking too many questions about my friend's illness, her drugs, and her operations, and in the end, I simply hoped for her to be free from pain. Ever since, however, my passion for studying cancer has grown and manifested itself in many ways.

One opportunity to explore and study cancer more arose during my time caring for a baby who had a rare form of leukemia. Though her cancer seemed terminal, Hannah survived thanks to an experimental treatment, coupled with the power of hope and positive thinking. Hannah’s survival evoked in me a great sense of respect for the field of research and its integral role in the evolving treatment of patients.

In medical school, I hope to build on my research to date in the field of cancer treatment, so that I can better explore the disease that afflicted my friend and so many others. Above all, I pursue a career in medicine because it will allow me to draw on my intense compassion for other human beings and improve the quality of their lives. I look forward to my medical education as the next step.

点评：

整篇文章融入了很真实的感情，可以深切的感受到笔者对于医学事业的热情、渴望、斗志……

第一段引人入胜的使读者深深感觉到笔者对于医学专业兴趣的产生，并表示出坚定的学习信息；第二段由一个感人至深的身边故事引入了自己对于研究癌症的专业决心。并且从中展现出了笔者的专业背景，对于病情的理解颇深，而将自身的专业背景展现给评审们也是极为必要的一部分。端正的人格品德对于一个从医者来说很重要，从文章中可以感受到笔者善良、热情的心。

末尾部分再次提出自己从业的目标，学习提升的方向，从而结束整篇文章。

译文:

我举起小塑料管，向环形末端吹气，泡泡便产生了。危地马拉小女孩Esperanza止住哭泣，入迷般地凝视着。我用西班牙语安慰她几句之后，她的好奇心变得更加强烈了。一天过后她到危地马拉的医院接受外科手术。我进行消毒之后走进Esperanza的手术室，坐到她旁边的恢复区。当她颤抖地睁开眼睛，欲将流泪之时，我再次打开盛满泡泡的瓶子。在她抬起手触摸泡泡的那一刹那，我比任何时候都渴望从事医学工作。尽管从小时候起我就想成为一名医师，这最特别的奖励是Esperanza赐与我的。如今，我视医学为连接科学和我对人类强烈同情的唯一途径——像对待她一样去让其他人的生命变得美好。

虽然我遇到Esperanza是在危地马拉，在我身边也有很多类似的事件。我的一个好朋友在她的高级舞会到来前一个月被查出患有转移性卵巢癌， 她的生命只剩下一年的时间。她在我上课的学校里接受治疗，徒然地与疾病抗争。尽管看到只有跟肿瘤学家在一起才能见到的场景发生在自己的好朋友身上让我内心倍受折磨，我依然难以抑制对癌症临床表现的好奇心。我对自己说不要询问关于朋友病情、药物、手术的事，最后我只单纯地希望她能不受痛苦。然而，从那时起，我研究癌症的热情提高了，并且从多方面得到体现。

一次护理婴儿Hannah的机会让我研究癌症的欲望变得更加强烈，她患上一种罕见的白血病。尽管她的癌症已经到了晚期，实验治疗、求生希望和乐观思想使她存活下来。Hannah活下来的事实引起了我对该研究领域和其在病人治疗中所起到完整作用的崇敬。

在医疗学校里，我一直希望能够在癌症治疗领域建立自己的研究，今后能够更好的探索折磨我的朋友和很多其他人的疾病。最重要的是，我执着于医学事业，因为它将允许我对人类倾注强烈同情并改善他们的生命质量。下一步我盼望接受医学教育。