[重要] 留学写作指南

Graduate Admissions Committee
Department of Fancy Discipline
Nice & Beautiful University
101 Hollywood Boulevard
Los Angeles, CA 10090
United States of America

Dear Sir or Madam:

I am a lecturer teaching video production at the Tsinghua University of China, one of the country's leading institutions of higher learning. I now wish to scale higher intellectual heights by pursuing advanced studies in a quality graduate program at an American university. Towards that end, I am writing to ask for a package of your application documents. Your timely assistance will be greatly appreciated.

I did my undergraduate studies at the Tsinghua University, where I now teach, and obtained a Master's Degree in 1996 at the Beijing Institute of Broadcasting, the best higher-learning institution of its kind in China. In the past two years, I have been serving as a popular teacher of television shooting and the making of documentary films. In this capacity, I have published a number of research papers concerning China's booming media industry.

As I try to ground myself more solidly in my teaching and research career, I need to broaden my vision and perspectives. Checking into the Peterson's Guide and other sources, I have found that your university offers the kind of graduate program that caters to my type of research interests. It is therefore hoped that this letter will start me off in a process that will lead to my enrolment in your program next year.

Yours sincerely

Jiao Dianshi

最初的联系信2

Chen Xuemin
P.O. Box 4444
Northern Industrial University
Beijing 100085
E-Mail: chenxue@mail.niu.edu.cn

Apr. 31, 1998
Graduate School
University of Wonders
London N55 44G
United Kingdom

Dear Sir or Madam:

I am a Chinese student due to graduate this year with a B.S. from the Computer Department of the Northern Industrial University, a distinguished higher-learning institution based in Beijing, China's capital. I would like to apply for acceptance into your graduate program so that I can further my training in my chosen field of studies. All your assistance will be highly appreciated.

I was born in 1976 in Liaoning, the country's most industrialized province, with a population of about 40 million. My education began in 1983 in my hometown Liaoyang's Nanlinzi Primary School. I did so well at Nanlinzi that I won admission in 1986 into the Liaoning Experiemental Primary School, which groups together the province's best and brightest children. It was at the Liaoning Experimental Primary School that I set out to learn computer programming with the BASIC language at only 11 years of age, which is quite unusual among Chinese children even today. In 1988, I moved on into the Liaoning Experimental Middle School, the cream of the province's high schools. In this middle school, I persevered in enhancing my computer expertise, which enabled me to win the championship at a contest of computer knowledge that involved all the high schools in Shenyang, the capital of Liaoning.

My schooling at the province's best high school paid off in 1994. That year, I gained acceptance into the Northern Industrial University on the strength of my impressive grades in the highly competitive National University Entrance Examinations, which are held annually nationwide to screen high school graduates for university education. In the four years since, I have been receiving systematic and comprehensive training in computer science, taking courses ranging from discrete mathematics, fundamentals of combinatorics, introduction to mathematical logic, assembly language, C language, data structure, compiler design theory, operating system, computer architecture and organization, to fundamentals of computer networks.

Meanwhile, I have also endeavored to improve my English proficiency. Recently, I took the TOFEL and GRE tests. Although the scores are still pending, I believe that they will be good.

I now would very much like to expand the horizon and insights that my education so far has endowed in me. Towards that end, I have checked around for a good Western university to go to. Judging by all that I know, I think your university suits my purpose the best. It would be a great privilege for me if I could join your graduate program to advance my training. Please send me an application package and all other material I might need to apply for acceptance.

Yours sincerely,

Chen Xuemin

最初的联系信修改稿

本信较长，是个颇极端的例子。由于原作者坚持要写满一页，所以改后稿也甚长。其实这么多文字很可能浪费了。这样一封用于索取资料的信，目的仅是要对方对自己产生兴趣，然后把申请和介绍材料寄给自己。一般来说，这种信不必要太长，也不必太详细地介绍自己，更不必要设计与自己学术能力无关的内容。当然，也不要使用Dear Leadership这种话，听起来让人起鸡皮疙瘩。

Dear President and Leadership,

My name is Tai Changle, I will graduate from Computer Department of Chinese Northern Industrial University this year. I would like to apply for further study as graduate student at your University. I took forward to your permission and reply. Here is my resume as following:

I was born in Liaoyang city of Liaoning Province, China, in June 10, 1976. I studied at the Nanlinzi Primary School in my home town from September 1983 to June 1986, at the Provincial Testing Primary School of Liaoning Province in Shenyang City from June 1986 to July 1988, at the provincial Testing Middle School of Liaoning Province In Shenyang City from September 1988 to February 1992, at the Middle School attached at the People's University of China in Beijing from February 1992 to July 1994. Since September 1994, I became an undergraduate at the Northern Industrial University of China in Beijing.

When I was 11 years old, I began to study BASIC language programming. In middle school, I kept on studying computer knowledge in my spare time, and won a championship at the competition of computer knowledge in which the students from all excellent High Schools in Shenyang City took part.

In the last four years, I have learned the courses on computer systematically, including Discrete Mathematics, Fundamentals of Combinatorics Introduction to Mathematical Logic, Assembly Language, C Language, Data Structure, Compiler Design Theory, Operating System, Computer Architecture and Organization, Fundamentals of Computer Networks and So on.

In the mean time, I took the TOFEL and GRE test. Last year, I got a license for drivers.

My four years undergraduate life is very wonderful and meaningful, it has expanded my horizon. I long for the chance to learn more knowledge. ## is the best university in my mind. I wish I could study at your University in the future.

Sincerely,

PERSONAL STATEMENT

By Jin Sheng

From this book, I learned a lot of modern technology that can improve the performance of computer, like pipelining and parallel processing. It made my mind. In the third year, I entered the laboratory, worked with Dr. Komatsu (chief researcher in IBM Tokyo Research Laboratory) and Dr. Koseki (researcher in IBM Tokyo Research Laboratory) on GIFT project. It introduces the following architecture supports that can allow compilers to derive more parallelism from programs. 1. A conditional execution mechanism. 3 A dynamic memory disambiguation mechanism to execute memory access instructions simultaneously.

As an undergraduate student, I only could do a limited research work, but at the seminar twice a week, I learned lots about parallel processing and software engineering. In laboratory, we read and discuss the paper and book, like " ADVANCED COMPILER DESIGN IMPLEMENTATION", with master students. Dr. Komatsu also taught us some new knowledge. My graduation thesis is :" An Improvement of Softwarepipelining using Loop Transformations". In that, I introduced a translation algorithm using Loop interchange and Loop skewing. This algorithm can minimize the initiation interval of loop nest to improve the performance of Softwarepipelining."

Yet parallel processing is mostly aren't in recent system, it is far from maturity. There are still some sequential algorithms can't be easily translated into fast parallel algorithms and most compiler can only distribute works on one platform. Another unsettled problem is rogramming parallel computers now is still a manual work, even the modern language ( like Java, C++) can do some automatic translation work. If there is a compiler that can translate and distribute work into different platforms, then personal computers can work like a supercomputer with low cost. Especially, today, more and more computers are connected by network, even in family. Contacting all computers in world to make the fastest one is not a dream.

Without advanced knowledge, I can do nothing but wait. In order to convert my undergraduate study into full play, graduate is necessity. Form the Web and my advisor's recommendation, I am pleased to learn that your department has an academic atmosphere where originality is appreciated and individual potential is explored. It will be the best place for my specialized study. If possible, my main interest in the future will be in the following areas.
Parallelizing and Distributing Compiler

Operating System

Computer Network

    Upon the completion of my study, I would work to realize the dream before. I believe it will fruit in the nearest future.

PERSONAL STATEMENT

By Jin Sheng

本科生往往没有太多的东西可写，重要的是要找到unique的角度。本文学习目的写得相当明确。

A fourth-year student grounded solidly in the basics of computer science, I am writing in pursuit of graduate studies that I hope can help me acquire cutting-edge expertise in software programming in general and parallel processing in particular.

Intrigued by the power of the computer since high school, I have been trying to stay on top of the computer science by concentrating my undergraduate studies on those subjects that underpin the discipline, particularly mathematics and electronics. To build up my solid knowledge in these subjects, I have taken virtually all the related courses that the university has had to offer. These courses include Algorithm & Data Structure, Mathematical Modeling, Network Theory, Digital Circuit, Discrete Mathematics, and Electric Circuit. With a sophisticated understanding in these areas, I have been well positioned to appreciate the basic theories of computer science and their applications to software development.

Aided by the firm command of the basics, I have found it not only easy but also exciting to study the various subjects covered by my major. As most of my classmates, I took a variety of courses ranging from AI to Computer Network, from AI Programming to Knowledge Engineering, from Pattern Recognition to Software Engineering, and from Database Design to Programming Language Design. But I distinguished myself by my academic record, which places me as one of the very top students in my class. My grades in these course never went below A or B. I have also stood out as one of the few who have taught themselves Real Time System and Computer Graphics.

Armed with sound training in the basic theories and applied technologies, I have been able to move on into deeper and wider areas of computer science. Early in my university life, I began to understand that the modern computer's base, the Turing machine, was reaching its limits in AI. Gradually, I have narrowed down my research interest to parallel & distributive computing, which I understand can significantly boost the performance of personal computers by giving them some of the functions of mainframe computers.

Of all the areas of computer science, parallel processing fascinates me the most. The term first came to me when I read the book Computer Organization & Design: the Hardware/software Interface as part of my Computer Architecture course. By teaching me how the performance of computers can be improved through pipelining and parallel processing, the book reshaped my thinking in computer science.

My lab experience deepened my understanding of parallel processing. In my third year, I worked on a GIFT project with Dr. Komatsu, chief researcher of IBM Tokyo Research Laboratory and Dr. Koseki, one of Dr. Komatsu's colleagues. The project was to introduce the architecture supports that can allow compilers to derive more parallelism from programs. These architecture supports include three designs, a conditional execution mechanism to execute instructions without normal conditional jump instructions, speculative execution mechanism, and a dynamic memory disambiguation mechanism to execute memory access instructions simultaneously.